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Part 3

His parents let him skip school the next day. It's the last day before spring break anyway, so it's mostly going to be teachers handing out crosswords or popping in videos. Dave decides to make proper use of his newfound free time by making the lists he’d planned to do over the weekend. He labels the top of each paper with the name of the college he’s considering, then carefully pencils in pros and cons as he thinks of them. When he's done with all three, Dave spreads them out on the floor to compare.


Being forced to put everything that he's been thinking on paper makes a number of things clearer. For one, Dave figures out he really isn't all that enthused about OSU. The pros list he has for them is half as long as the ones he made for Miami and Boston, and most of them are stupid things like "being able to score cheap tickets to Buckeye games." Dave reads the list through carefully twice just to make sure he really can’t think of anything else, then without ceremony throws the list in the trash. He pulls Miami and Boston closer together and compares them side by side.


It's not an easy decision. Most of the pros Dave that has listed apply equally to both universities. Broad program selection. Small class size. Willingness to admit Dave. He reads through the letters they sent him, and though they differ in the details the amount they're offering in their National Letters of Intent is about the same. So it really comes down to the campus and what he wants. Does Dave want to attend a huge urban college on the eastern seaboard? Or would he rather go to a smaller suburban school in western Ohio?


A week ago, Dave would have answered yes to the first question in a heartbeat. Now, he's not so sure.


The truth is, Dave recognizes a lot of his own thinking in Kurt's. The plans that Dave made to come out in college were always for a place that was far away from here. Boston had been his favorite choice simply because Dave knew that being gay there would be easy. Kurt had almost undoubtedly thought the same and Dave can imagine what it would be like to have that dream and have it taken away.


He can't help but think now, though, that this whole time they've been selling Ohio short. After all, look at Dave's parents. They knew Dave was gay for months and waited for him to tell them. Or Puckerman, who had noticed Dave wasn't tossing slushies anymore but kept quiet and was now apparently chill with the fact he liked dudes. Or the protesters Dave had seen on his college tour, the ones with the brightly painted faces who made Dave realize that coming out would be okay. Lima may be years from celebrating gay marriage like in Boston, but it's not exactly the cesspool of homophobia that Dave used to think it either.


Once he acknowledges that, his choice becomes blindingly clear.


"I'm signing for Miami," he tells his parents when they get home that night.


The two of them look nonplussed. After a moment, his dad ventures, "I thought you had your heart set on Boston, son?"


Dave shakes his head. "I didn't really like the campus," he admits. "It was too big, too noisy and you couldn't really distinguish it from the surrounding city. It didn't feel like a college campus to me, you know? I liked the visits I made to Miami much better. I feel like I would do better there and besides I think their coach plans to use me more anyway."


His mom reacts to the shift in his enthusiasm with aplomb. "Well, it'll be certainly nice to have you closer to home," she says diplomatically. "Only an hour, that's not too long for you to come home some weekends."


"And if you think they'll play you more, then you're more likely to stay on the team for multiple seasons," his father adds sagely.


Dave grins, because his dad still doesn't know any more about sports than he did when Dave first started playing, but the fact that he's making an effort means everything. Dave maybe hugs both his parents then and tries not to think about how over the past week that might have started to become a habit. He's not sure if he minds if it has.


Church that weekend is kind of awkward. Dave and his parents don't go every week, but they always try to make the major holidays. So while he's not certain, Dave's pretty sure that in previous years they never had anyone stare at them throughout the entire Easter mass. It’s not even that they’re whispering behind their hands or anything; it’s just that when Dave looks, it seems like half the congregation is always watching them, a strange mixture of curiosity and disapproval on their faces. He can tell his mom notices too by the way that the corners of her mouth turn down. When the mass is over, she ushers Dave and his father out without stopping to talk to anyone and then doesn't say a word the whole car ride home.


Dave remembers suddenly how Mercedes had talked about wanting to take Kurt to some gay-friendly church she found. He understands now why the “gay-friendly” portion was so important and wonders if she ever actually managed to talk Kurt around. He wonders how she found out about the church in the first place and resolves to ask her about it the next time he sees her. Of course, knowing Mercedes she'll probably knee Dave in the junk for what he said to Kurt in the cafeteria, but he figures it's at least worth a shot. 


Dave prints out the National Letter of Intent from Miami and signs it Monday night. He gives it to his father to sign too, who hesitates briefly.


"This isn't because of Kurt, is it?" he asks. "Because you know, David, you shouldn't pick a college just because--"


Dave cuts him off. "Boston would have been more about Kurt, Dad. Miami is about what I want."


His father nods, signs the letter, and puts it in his briefcase to fax the next day. "Just thought I'd check."


Tuesday is the last day of what Dave's sure must be the shortest spring break in the history of ever. (He hates the Lima school district and their scheduling system with a passion sometimes.) Dave decides not to waste it, gets up early and does some running before plopping himself in front of the Xbox to settle in for a serious gaming marathon. He's just starting up the console when there's a series of knocks at the door.


When he opens it, Kurt's standing there in a slate grey peacoat on his front step. "Hey," he says, sounding awkward.


"What are you doing here?" falls out of Dave's mouth before he can think better of it and Dave steps outside. He pulls the door shut behind him -- which is stupid because it’s not like there’s anyone at home he’s trying to keep this conversation secret from -- and looks down at Kurt guardedly.


Kurt, for his part, raises tentative eyes to meet his. "You said I owed you some explanations," he says. "I think you're right.” His eyes flicker to the door. “May I come in?"


If this conversation is about to go anything like Dave thinks it might, then Dave definitely doesn't want to have it inside his house. "There's a park a couple blocks from here,” he suggests instead. “Why don't we head there?"


Kurt makes a face but nods. He lets Dave lead the way and they don't talk on the way over. The playground is empty this time of day, so Dave sits down on one of the swings and stretches his legs out with a little satisfied grunt. Kurt huffs a laugh but sits gingerly on the swing next to him anyway.


They're both kind of determinedly not looking at each other when Kurt says, abruptly, "I dated three guys while I was at Dalton."


Dave's not sure what he's supposed to say to that, so he keeps silent and waits for Kurt to explain.


"You met the first guy. Blaine? He's the one who came to McKinley to talk to you after the locker room kiss," continues Kurt. "We weren't dating at the time, by the way. That didn't happen until a few months later, after I transferred. We broke up when he left for college because it made sense at the time and we'd also kind of realized we were maybe too similar to each other. Relationships are hard when you both share all the same weaknesses and the same strengths."


Kurt snorts. "Okay, that's giving myself way too much credit. As much as I would like to have been that self-aware, honestly?” he says wryly. “I was just devastated by the loss of my first boyfriend. I started going out with another guy just to prove that I could and made sure he was the complete opposite of Blaine to make my point clear. That guy's name was Ethan."


"You don't have to tell me about all the people you've slept with, Kurt," Dave interjects harshly, because he really doesn't see where Kurt is going with this.


"Ethan was five or six inches taller than me, blond, muscles," persists Kurt, "and for your information we didn't sleep together. In fact, we mostly just kissed. But Ethan was the one who made me aware I had a certain appeal to select members of the rainbow coalition -- namely, to large guys who were looking for someone they could easily pin down. It wasn't my thing," he comments dispassionately, "but it certainly was Ethan's, and I couldn't deny I wasn't thinking about Blaine whenever he did it."


Dave feels his hands curl tight around the chain of the swing. "So on that Friday then--" he forces out.


"I wanted to forget about Boston and was looking for someone who would make it hurt," Kurt says plainly. "With the way you used to shove me into lockers, I was sure you'd fit the bill."


Dave tries to laugh, but some kind of strangled sound comes out instead. "So you really weren't kidding when you said you wanted a taste of the Fury," he says at last.


"It isn't my fault you apparently have the naming aptitude of a five-year-old," Kurt defends wildly, waving his hands. "How was I supposed to know you'd be all weirdly considerate and tender?"


"Maybe you should have taken into consideration the fact I've had a crush on you since sophomore year and would have done anything for a second chance," Dave shoots back.


Something in Kurt's face changes sharply at that last part. "Oh my Gaga," he breathes. He stands up abruptly and moves a few paces away, turning his back toward Dave. The line of his shoulders is tense, and when he speaks Kurt's voice is weird and borderline hysterical. "I was your first, wasn't I?"  


Dave's face burns and he’s suddenly glad Kurt chose to turn his back for this. "Wasn't anyone else I liked with you gone," he mutters to the mulch.


Kurt's shoulders start shaking and it takes Dave a minute to realize that he's laughing -- not in the "ha ha isn't it hilarious that I broke the jock's heart" kind of way, but more in a slightly unhinged fashion that suggests "how is this my life" instead. Dave doesn't really know anything to do in this kind of situation so he just waits patiently until Kurt stops laughing and sits back down.


"I'm sorry," Kurt says. He looks down at his hands. "I never would have done that if I knew it would be your first time. Your first should be special."


Dave kicks some mulch. "It wasn't that bad," he says quietly and pauses. "Up to the point where you left."


"I'm sorry," Kurt says again. "I guess in some ways I still thought of us in this ‘former tormenter with his favorite target’ mindset and I just wanted to get out of there as cleanly as possible. I should have known better."


"I wouldn't say that," disagrees Dave. He gestures between them. "I mean, look at us, we're not exactly friends."


"I think maybe we could be," replies Kurt. He plays with the edge of his sleeve for a moment before asking hesitantly, "So what are your plans for Boston?"


Dave gains an understanding of Kurt’s earlier hysteria as he suddenly laughs from deep in his gut. "I'm not going to Boston, Kurt."


Kurt's eyebrows disappear into his hair. "You're not?" he asks disbelievingly.


"Nope," agrees Dave. He pushes himself off the swing and shoves both hands in his pockets. "I thought about it and realized I'd really rather sign for Miami."


"Miami, Ohio?" Kurt repeats, like he's checking for brain damage.


"Miami, Ohio," Dave confirms. Then, because it seems important, he says, "There's nothing wrong with Ohio, Kurt. You've just got to be willing to look past a lot of crap to see it. People everywhere are becoming more accepting all the time, and on the colleges I visited being gay wasn't a big deal at all. Hell, even at McKinley Puckerman approves of us."


"Puck? Noah Puckerman?"


"Yep." Dave pauses. "Does he really call you Princess Peach?"


Kurt snorts. "Behind my back, I wouldn't doubt it," he says dryly. He seems more fondly exasperated by the news than displeased.


Dave files that away for future reference. "My point is," he continues, "that if even the über-straight jock who used to toss you into dumpsters every morning can go from that to having your back, then maybe you really should give Ohio more of a chance."


Kurt exhales loudly. "I'll consider it." He looks up at Dave. "So where exactly is Miami University?"


Dave stares. "Really? You were giving me crap for choosing Miami and you don't even know where it is?" Kurt stares back at him, unrepentant. Dave gives up. "It's about an hour south of here, small college town," he offers.


"About an hour," says Kurt thoughtfully. “Huh.” Dave waits, but Kurt doesn't elaborate any further.


"We cool?" he says finally, just to break the silence.


Kurt stands and brushes himself off. "Yes, Karofsky, I believe we are 'cool,'" he says drolly. The special emphasis he places on the last word makes it clear that he's mocking Dave.


"Watch it, Hummel," Dave growls. He grins and Kurt smirks back.


School the next day isn't that bad. People are still talking about Dave pretty much nonstop, but none of the other jocks are trying to slushie him or anything. Apparently being two hundred pounds and having a somewhat undeserved reputation for fits of berserker rage are more than enough to serve effectively as deterrents for most people. Dave moves his equipment back into his locker after homeroom and dares anyone with a glare to tell him otherwise.


Puckerman gives him an approving nod when he catches Dave in the halls and Dave gives him his own satisfied little jerk in return. Unfortunately, this causes him to miss the sight of an incoming Finn Hudson, who skillfully manages to corner Dave against the lockers.


"Karofsky," Hudson says firmly and Dave prepares himself to receive a verbal onslaught like no other. Instead of lashing into him about Kurt, though, Hudson just starts babbling -- about fire alarms of all things and the need that they have for their batteries to be regularly replaced and the importance of fire alarms, though highly undervalued by many people in today's society, in the unlikely but still very possible event of a fire. He’s just moved on to firefighters and how they’re really good at putting out fires if you ever accidentally forget to change your batteries when it hits Dave that Hudson's trying to ask whether he and Kurt used protection.


"Oh for freak's sake," he says in horror and yanks Hudson's head in close.


"I'm only going to say this once," he whispers fiercely. "He had a condom. We were safe. Now considering this is your stepbrother we're talking about, both of us are going to agree to never speak of this again. That clear?"


Hudson nods and Dave releases him. Hudson rubs his neck a little and then looks at Dave oddly. "Just -- be good to him, okay?" he says weirdly and walks off before Dave can ask him what he means.


He gets his answer the next day when Kurt comes up to Dave after the final bell and without any warning pushes him flat to kiss him against the lockers. Dave's hands drop to Kurt's hips automatically and he kisses back for a few seconds before it occurs to him where they are and he hurriedly pulls away.


Kurt's looking at him, eyes bold and determined. "So, I lied," he says.


Dave's heart sinks even as he has no idea what Kurt's talking about. "What?"


"There was still one school I was waiting to hear back from yet,” he explains. “Theater schools are generally pretty good about letting you know whether or not you're in right away so I figured I'd been put on their waiting list in case someone else dropped. Well, they emailed me last night.” He grins. “I've been accepted."        


"That's great, Kurt," Dave says breathlessly, because he can't think of anything else to say. Then something occurs to him. "Wait, what school?"


"The Conservatory of Music at the University of Cincinnati," Kurt replies. “It’s a lot cheaper than Boston and Cincinnati has need-based financial aid so what they’re offering me is actually possible.” He takes a deep breath. "I checked and it's only about an hour away from Miami, so I'm not saying it would be easy, but it’s really not any further than when I thought the distance would be Lima and Miami and I was willing to try that so--"


"Kurt," Dave interrupts dazedly, because no way is this actually happening. "Are you asking me to be your boyfriend?"


Kurt keeps babbling over him. "And we'd have this whole last month of school and all summer to see if we actually worked first and, okay, I never thought I’d say this, but I really think that we--"


Dave kisses him just to be able to answer. "Yes," he says when he pulls back, absurdly pleased to discover that Kurt closed his eyes. "I would love to be your boyfriend."


Kurt's eyes snap open. "Really?" he says. "Because I should tell you now, my dad wants to threaten you with a tire iron."


Dave would laugh, but having met Burt Hummel he's fairly certain that Kurt's serious. "Even then," he replies.


"And I'm going to warn you now," Kurt continues, "we're taking things slow. I know I might have given you the wrong impression at first but I am totally a flowers and romance kind of guy."


"I wouldn't expect any differently of you," Dave says honestly and laces their hands together just to prove his point.


Kurt looks down at their linked hands and pauses. "You really should stop calling yourself the Fury, you know."


Dave shrugs. "Kind of used to it at this point," he says. "Besides, it's easier to shout at games than 'Karofsky.'"


"I can think of other places it'd be easier to shout," replies Kurt immediately before burying his face in Dave's chest, shoulders shaking in mortified laughter.


Dave pats him on the back. "Yeah, we're both going to pretend you never said that," he says dryly. He tips his head toward the exit. "You want to make out under the bleachers?"


Kurt tilts his head up at him and smiles. "I thought you'd never ask."


Author's Note

When I first came up with the idea for this fic, I seriously only planned for it to be about 2k of porn. I was looking for something easy to write as a personal break from the generally crushing angst of the Rehabilitation Saga and I figured it could be something quick I wrote while we were all waiting for the new episodes to air. So this fic started life as an attempted flashfic, but over the weeks it quickly exploded to become THE MONSTER THAT SWALLOWED OHIO instead. Incidentally, it also became my love letter to Ohio, my former home, with all its endearing foibles and hopeless charm. This one's for you, Buckeye State.


Major thanks go to my mom, who answered countless questions at all hours about circumstances in various regions of Ohio, and to all my friends at Miami and OSU who provided the minor details necessary to make this story work.

I'd also like to give a tip of my hat to whoever designed the website for Boston Conservatory, which is the single most intuitive and easy to navigate website I have ever seen for a college in my life. Kudos, BC.


And a final thanks to all my readers, especially if you actually took the time to read this little bit of rambling. Your comments, as always, are ♥♥♥


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Date: 2011-02-15 07:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh my God, this was beautiful. Absolutely amazing. I stayed up way too late to read this, and work in the morning is going to be hell, but I don't care, because this was worth it. Oh, if only it could happen like this.

Date: 2011-02-15 02:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Right now I'm still holding out for something even better to come from RIB, but if they screw Kurtofsky over then you're welcome to come live in in my head. \o/

Date: 2011-02-15 07:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This is such a well-written fic. I'm in awe. It was so good. Just the right amount of plot and porn. And the characters were so spot on, I'm thinking you're RIB in disguise.

Awesome, amazing work!

Date: 2011-02-15 03:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
*considers shaggy head of curls* RIB, no. Ian, maybe. But thanks for the compliment!

Date: 2011-02-15 08:02 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
What an awesome fic! Thanks for letting it take over and swallow Ohio. I'm sure I'll be reading this one again and again. Slow-burn Kurtofsky fics are my favorite and this one is quite realistic and honest. Good job!

Date: 2011-02-15 03:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Ohio will always rise again! Possibly in a sidestory from Kurt's POV! But shh, you didn't hear that from me. ~_^

Date: 2011-02-15 08:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
geez, this just got better with every part. I was sad to see it end, but very happy with the ending.

Karofsky's coming out was so brilliant. His gradual realization as he visited colleges that he could be accepted for who he is, telling his dad, and the cafeteria. just wow.

and the conversation with Finn on safe sex made me lol

I really enjoy your Glee writing. Please continue :D

Date: 2011-02-15 03:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Finn's attempt to lecture on safe sex was one of my favorite parts of the fic to write. Oh, Finn, never change.

Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-02-15 08:50 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This was lovely. Your take on Karofsky is a breath of fresh air. ♥

Date: 2011-02-15 03:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
People like to write Karofsky as this kind of ultra tough guy character, which never fails to make me laugh because every time we catch a glimpse of the guy's true personality on the show he's nothing but a total marshmallow. Inaccurately-named-Fury/Fancy FTW!

Date: 2011-02-15 09:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Gorgeous writing, this is fantastic work. Thank you very much for sharing it with us.

Date: 2011-02-15 03:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you for reading! ♥

Date: 2011-02-15 09:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
You know what this is? This is a fic I'll recommend to any person complaining that there's no such thing as a realistic Kurtofsky fic. This fic is, to put in simply, brilliant. The slow, slow progress, the seemingly out of blue sex scene that makes complete sense after the fact, the cafeteria coming out, Finn asking about safe sex, Dave's coming out to his dad and the happy ending I didn't see coming - loved it all!
Fantastic, brilliant, inspired work.

Date: 2011-02-15 03:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This is a fic I'll recommend to any person complaining that there's no such thing as a realistic Kurtofsky fic.

Aww, thank you! I do see the potential for Kurtofksy to happen someday in the future, but like you said, it's a long, slow road to that point.

the seemingly out of blue sex scene that makes complete sense after the fact

This clause is actually the reason for the entire fic. I wanted to write a tender one-night stand for Dave and Kurt, but hit a wall trying to make that fit with their characters. I started sketching out some background details to make the decision make sense on both their ends and before I knew it I'd written about 18k of background story to go with my porn. Er, oops?

Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review! I always appreciate when readers tell me specifically what they liked about a story, and your comments in particular never fail to make me smile. ♥♥♥ \o/

Date: 2011-02-15 10:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
So this popped up and I had to read it. And I'm so glad I did, because it was beautiful. The angst nearly killed me post-sex, but in the best way possible. I liked the almost role reversal here, with Kurt being more forward and in control, and even sexually experienced, and Dave being quiet and polite (eventually) and a virgin. Basically, what I'm trying to say is that I loved this.

But also? Finn's safe-sex talk was hilariously awkward and amusing, I'll love you forever for that one.

Date: 2011-02-15 03:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I liked the almost role reversal here, with Kurt being more forward and in control, and even sexually experienced, and Dave being quiet and polite (eventually) and a virgin.

Role reversal is my favorite thing to write in fandom, if only because it means I have less competition from other authors. \o/ The idea of a super-vanilla Karofsky, however, was simply begging to be written. In my mind, there is no other possibility after the locker room kiss that could have been forceful but wasn't. Plus the way he backed off right away when Kurt said no? Not something someone into dominance would do.

Finn's safe-sex talk skills are sadly under-utilized. I want him to offer to print pamphlets for Mrs. Pillsbury, because the results would be epic. Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-02-15 11:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This was exquisite! So well-paced, well-written and believable. I fell in love with your Dave's voice. Just, guh.

Oh, Kurt. I love how he isn't even there for a big part of the story but he still managed to break my heart a few times. And that ending! Loved it.

I really liked the insight into homophobic enviroment, Kurt 'plaing the martyr' and Dave giving Ohio a change. It's something I've never encountered before in a fanfic and you handled it so well! *__*

Date: 2011-02-15 04:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I fell in love with your Dave's voice.

♥♥♥ You have no idea how happy this comment makes me, because Dave's voice is possibly my favorite part of the entire fic. I wanted to show Dave could be a really sweet and honest guy underneath all his bravado and that his struggles to come to terms with his issues were in no way a reflection on his ability to think.

I really liked the insight into homophobic enviroment, Kurt 'plaing the martyr' and Dave giving Ohio a change. It's something I've never encountered before in a fanfic and you handled it so well! *__*

Thank you! This is something really personal for me, because I'm on track to graduate next year and I'm considering whether or not I want to move back to Ohio when I do. On the one hand, the legal situation in Ohio really is bad. Same-sex couples lack almost all legal rights, including protection from workplace discrimination and the ability to name both partners on an adoption form. On the other hand, Ohio is the place where my family lives, and even though I have lost some close friends since coming out I have also found overwhelming amounts of acceptance in places I never expected. So I'm keeping my mind open for the time being and not ruling anything out.

Thanks for reading!

Date: 2011-02-15 04:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
*This* is amazing. It's a slow, realistic build up of a real relationship that I can completely see happening. I love Dave's gradual maturity. It's a beautiful, well written story and thank you for sharing it with us.

Also, GO MIAMI! When you first brought up the school I was like"OMG, Dave should so go to my Alum. They have a GREAT hockey team!" Then I realized I was actually wearing my Miami Alumni shirt while I was reading. Small world. :) Their gay alliance (called Spectrum, in case you ever feel like writing a sequel:), is awesome. They host lots of events and are very well known around campus. And Miami has the same benefits for same-sex couples as married straight ones for all their employees, which is awesome.)

Date: 2011-02-15 05:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Hooray for Miami alums! I don't know about where you grew up, but where I did Miami was one of those big universities everyone hoped to get into. When I found out they had a Division I hockey team, I immediately went "There. Dave's going there and heaven help me I'm going to make the decision a major part of the plot." \o/

Ooo, and thanks for the details about Spectrum! No sequel planned yet, but I might be writing a companion piece from Kurt's point of view sometime soon. We'll see how much free time I find.

Date: 2011-02-15 04:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I am so glad I read this. It just made my day. It was perfect. Thank you.

Date: 2011-02-15 05:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
♥ Glad I could make your day a little brighter!

Date: 2011-02-15 04:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I freaking love this story. and Im really glad it became more then just 2k of p0rn :D

because it is beautiful. in all of it - as a story of two unlikely people fidning love, as a personal journey of a scared and confused boy to becoming a man, as a littel ode to friendship, and even as a love letter to a state

thank you for sharing it all. it saved this crappy day for me

Date: 2011-02-15 05:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
as a story of two unlikely people fidning love, as a personal journey of a scared and confused boy to becoming a man, as a littel ode to friendship, and even as a love letter to a state

♥♥♥ I love this summary so much. Thank you for reading, and I'm glad my story was able to make your day a little bit brighter!

Date: 2011-02-15 05:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh, this was so fricking good. I read it in a one go, since I was able and loved every single bit. Somehow I just love this sort of Kurt who deserves a slap in his head before he comes to his senses. And Dave was so amasing. ♥

Also I learned new things, which is always a good bonus. I had no idea there was a place (college) in Ohio called Miami. Took a bit googling (now I know more about Ohio than I did a few hours ago, awesome) after thinking there's no way it's only an hour trip to Miami, FL...

Ooh, and Dave's parents were really sweet and funny. I liked the fact how his dad already knew Dave was gay.

Date: 2011-02-15 06:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
LOL. Yes, a town called Miami does exist in western Ohio, though it's considerably less well known than its Florida counterpart. Miami University is considered one of the more prestigious universities available in Ohio and a number of highly-motivated students apply for admission there each year. The fact that they're also one of the top 15 schools in the US for Division I hockey is what cemented Miami's placement in the story for me.

It's my head!canon at the moment that Karofsky's dad has some suspicions about what's going on with Dave, but he's waiting until he has proof to say something. The scene in S1 where Kurt comes out to Burt is hands-down fantastic, and I really hope we get to see more surprise acceptance on Glee.

Date: 2011-02-15 06:43 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
My god, it shouldn't be called one-shot, it's huge!!! But it's as long as amazing! =D

Your characterization is awesome, the way you capture Kurt's flaws and Dave's qualities and set them on an even level is perfect!

Thanks for sharing!

Date: 2011-02-15 07:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
LOL. I probably should change the tag on this, shouldn't I? But I'm glad you still thought it was awesome! ♥
Edited Date: 2011-02-15 07:48 pm (UTC)

Date: 2011-02-15 08:30 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
That was absolutely lovely! It was sweet and funny and sad at some points but a happy ending! Squeee! I am a sucker for a happy ending!

Thank you! I hope you write more because we do not have enough fanfics in this fandom - and I LOVED this! <3

Date: 2011-02-15 08:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I posted my comment before I realized it was "Anonymous". So...from me to you - great job! More, more, more!

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Date: 2011-02-15 09:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
That was just absolutely amazing.

There were so many parts I liked, I can't even begin to go over it.

Your exchanges were amazing and your details were so fantastic.
I truly appreciate how much effort and time you put into making it 'real'.

Now, I can only hope you end up writing more for this fandom, because this was one of my favorites!~

Date: 2011-02-15 10:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
"Real" is the only deal I know when it comes to writing. Well, besides crack, of course. Come on, there's someone out there who would appreciate the fairy tale of Fancy and the Fury, right? Right? \o/

Date: 2011-02-15 09:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This is fan-fucking-tastic. I loved every word of it. I won't lie and deny that the sex and angst parts of the plot drew me in, but I read it through and fell in love with your writing style and with your characterization of Dave. (YAY for hockey!Dave; it seems that ever since SSBS even more fanfiction authors are writing him as a hockey player, almost in defiance, lol!)

Your Kurt, while basically being a supporting character in this fic, was very believable. He was sassy and adult and (thought he) knew what he wanted. I like how you mentioned he was on the Warblers' council, and I could just picture in my head his grand entrance and return to McKinley, strutting with half the Glee club at his back :D

I was also very impressed by your Dave's inner voice and his attitude, and with all the research you've done into Ohio regions and into the various colleges Dave checked out. It shows a real dedication to your story.

I also kind of love that you've called this "THE MONSTER THAT SWALLOWED OHIO" because the fics that eat your brain when you intended them to just be little one-shots or pure porn are the best :)

Altogether very well done, a great story to spend the evening reading. Thank you! :)

Date: 2011-02-15 11:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
(YAY for hockey!Dave; it seems that ever since SSBS even more fanfiction authors are writing him as a hockey player, almost in defiance, lol!)

Lol, really? Awesome! I finished the first draft of this story literally ten minutes before SSBS aired (yay for meeting deadlines!) and I was so ticked when it looked like they were now retconning Dave out of hockey. I was just considering whether or not to modify the story's timeline a little when a couple scenes later they said that Kurt commuted to Westerville and back every day (a two hour drive, check it out) and I just went, "Okay, screw it. If we're going to ignore all rules of logic here, RIB, THEN DAVE IS A HOCKEY PLAYER FOREVER IN MY HEART!" And that was that.

I also kind of love that you've called this "THE MONSTER THAT SWALLOWED OHIO" because the fics that eat your brain when you intended them to just be little one-shots or pure porn are the best :)

Oh, laws, you are not kidding, girl. Every time I started writing another scene about hockey or college or Dave's parents, I was just like "FIIIIIIC! YOU ARE SUPPOSED TO BE PORN! WHY ARE YOU NOT PORN?!" But developing the characters to the point where the porn could happen was honestly the most satisfying part of writing the whole thing.

Plus, Puck and Mercedes' random cameos were just too much fun to pass up. \o/

♥♥♥ Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-02-15 09:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Wonderful build-up of the story, and the dialogues are so real and so neat. Adding you to memories while writing this comment.

Date: 2011-02-15 10:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Aww, thank you! I hope your rainbow-colored wings fit too! ♥♥♥

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Date: 2011-02-15 10:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I spent all morning reading this because I have no life because it's completely amazing and ate my brain. I love the idea that what we've seen of Dave so far has been him completely losing the ability to function around Kurt.

And oh my god, all of the rest of it was just a roller coaster of emotions. From aww'ing at Dave trying to be friends with Kurt to fanning myself over the sex and feeling like my heart was breaking at Kurt. Wow, this is going straight into my mems.

Date: 2011-02-15 11:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
he idea that what we've seen of Dave so far has been him completely losing the ability to function around Kurt

This is totally my head!canon at the moment. My favorite example of this is when Dave goes up to Kurt during "Furt" and it seriously looks like he's trying to say something nice to him but instead just kind of fails horribly so he grabs the wedding topper as an excuse and runs away. Oh, Dave. Try writing, it'll last longer.

Date: 2011-02-15 10:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This was amazing. Wonderfully written. Great job!

Date: 2011-02-15 10:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you for reading! ♥

Date: 2011-02-15 11:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I said it before (like, an hour ago, I think) and I'll say it again here - you've written the first Glee/Kurtofsky novel - so valid, so possible, so plausible. (OK, that's redundant, but I don't believe in using one word when three will do...)

I love your perspective on Dave and his development, his parents (love that Paul Karofsky!), and his acceptance of himself.

Wish that we could see something more like this from RM, but he can't take the time to look at anyone that closely, now can he? Or rather, he *did* look at Kurt that closely, before he banished him to Dalton.

So thank you for writing this, for posting it, and for giving Dave the soul and the heart he deserves...
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Date: 2011-02-15 11:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
you've written the first Glee/Kurtofsky novel


*sets up internet author meet and greet*


*thinks of obscure angsty idea twelve people in their right mind would like to read*

*runs away cackling*

Seriously, though, thank you for your awesome comment! I see a lot of layers in Max Adler's performance of Dave and after SSBS I'm holding out hope that RIB will take the time to pull some of them apart for us. Dave with a heart FTW!

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Awww, wah...

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Date: 2011-02-15 11:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
YES. I love how well this was written and developed. I love how you focused on Karofsky first. How he need to grow up and come to terms with himself first. You did a great job with that, by the way. It seemed completely natural for his character.
And just the way it all happened with Kurt and, talk about a weird start to a relationship. But it was fantastic and so different. It seemed, again, natural.
Once again. I loved it! Great job!
You considering a sequel or anything?

Date: 2011-02-16 12:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
talk about a weird start to a relationship

If I had to express my feeling on their relationship during this fic through emoticons, it probably would go something like this: >_< O_o *_* ;_; >_< O_O -_- ^_^ ♥_♥

... I'm not sure whether that was helpful for anyone other than me. SUDDENLY KURTOFSKY!

No sequel planned at the moment, but I'll probably do a companion piece from Kurt's POV since originally I planned for this to be from both their POV and I already have his plotline more or less written. Just need to tackle the next installment in the Rehabilitation Sage first. Yeah, soul-crushing angst! \o/
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Date: 2011-02-16 12:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
So so awesome

Date: 2011-02-16 12:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
*cackles like Ursula the Sea Witch* Thanks, sweetheart!

Date: 2011-02-16 12:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This is incredibly cute, as well as well-written. Although I agree with some of the above comments about the suddenness-- aggravated, I think, by the fact that we never see from any perspective but Dave's. Not a bad thing, though... actually kind of different. And interesting. I'm definitely planning on looking up some of your older stuff now :).

Date: 2011-02-16 02:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
You're right: it IS very sudden from Dave's perspective, but from Kurt's there's a thought process going on that's almost as long as Dave's. I hope to explore it a little in a companion piece soon. Thank you for reading!

Date: 2011-02-16 03:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
This was just lovely. The development with Dave was so believable, and the ending was really very cute. This is just such a beautifully written story, I really enjoyed reading it.

Date: 2011-02-16 03:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
♥ I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
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